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Kara Mattingly    Comment by Sonu Mishra: Title page is fine. However, as per APA guidelines, you are supposed to put page numbers as well as Title of the paper.
05/30/2020
HLT-364
Kristy Osgood DPM, MPH
In the fast pace and stressful world of those that are willing to risk their life for yours there is a new and startling concern on the rise. This concern is the misfortunate death of these
ave heroes via suicide. While the stakeholders may differ depending on rather the company is private or government supported one stakeholder that never changes is the First Responder as it is their life at stake. While these suicides may reflect poorly on management their it is not apparent that there is any protocol in place to continuously monitor the mental health of these vital first responders. The sudden death of a coworker is tough to combat in any situation especially when the group looks at itself as family. The suicide of a coworker can easily have a negative effect on employee moral especially when the staff feels as if management should have done more for the recently deceased.Suicide amongst First Responders is growing, and it can be linked to a poor support system combined with poor wages that help lead to burnout which increases the stress in an already stressful job as well as an increase of mental fatigue.     Comment by Sonu Mishra: Rapidly changing     Comment by Sonu Mishra: Please identify who are these people. are they professional healthcare workers? If yes, please ensure that their names are mentioned. Also, what category of healthcare professionals you are dealing with here? Please be specific.     Comment by Sonu Mishra: Unfortunate     Comment by Sonu Mishra: A casual shift is taken here from the opening. When expanding the main idea, we should stick to what is our main goal of writing. Also, the term first responder does not qualify fully to be added here. Let’s say, “for healthcare workers, they stand as the first line of defense for humankind and due to extreme pressure they take, it is likely possible that they go through immense amount of stress at workplace.”     Comment by Sonu Mishra: It should be managing their…    Comment by Sonu Mishra: Nice perception.     Comment by Sonu Mishra: Fellow employees’ moral status     Comment by Sonu Mishra: Overall, the projection of thesis is nicely structured over the topic.     Comment by Sonu Mishra: Increased mental fatigue
It is easier to cover the stressors and risks at an individual basis when it comes to career paths. Let’s start with the E.M.T.’s as they are often exposed to many different aspects of beigna first responder. “The results showed that 3,447 (86%) of the 4,022 respondents experienced CS, but the shocking discovery was that 1,383 (37%) of the respondents had contemplated suicide and 225 (6.6%) had actually tried to take their own life. (See Figure 1.) These statistics are roughly 10 times greater than the national average for adults in America, according to a study done by the Centers for Disease Control and Prevention in 2012” (Ba
er et al 2015).This is clearly an unacceptable statistic that needs to be addressed immediately as working as any level as an E.M.T. is a labor of love and compassion. According to Ziprecruiter.com the national average for an E.M.T. is fourteen dollars an hour. Keep in mind this is not the entry level pay this is the average according the ziprecruiter.com entry level pay can be as low as ten dollars and eighty-two cents an hour. These first responders see as much as the police and firefighters do as they tend to respond to both fire and police runs. They don’t just see death on a scene of a suicide, shooting, or car wreck, they also see it in the back of their med. unit when they are trying to save a life. It is however not uncommon for the fire department to make medical runs with E.M.S. as some cities and counties have protocols in which require fire to respond with E.M.S.. “Several co
elates of suicidality (alcohol use, depression, posttraumatic stress) have been identified in the literature as applicable to firefighte
EMS populations; however, few studies to date have examined the specific co
elates of suicidality (lifetime suicidal ideation and/or attempts) in a firefighte
EMS sample” (Martin &Buser, 2017).    Comment by Sonu Mishra: This is your topic sentence and it should introduce the first main idea given through thesis. You have stated that development of suicidal tendencies is linked to poor support system. However, the discussion here is opening with the career path of First Responders.     Comment by Sonu Mishra: Valid support to your point is given here. But, please mention how your entire opening...